I would say the main part of my paper is the lack of progress in how much is getting done. This is most likely because after my 3-5 page paper, I decided to go in a new direction with the paper, which includes new sources, and basically deleting everything except the episode summery, which I re-wrote anyway.
When I started over, I feel like I have some really good information, but am not exactly sure which order I want to present it in, in order to obtain the best argument. One example of what I thought was best was to start talking about some facts of crimes of passion and the unlikely type of people who commit them and start to talk about an example of it. “A story about a University of Georgia marketing professor committing a crime of passion, a triple homicide to be exact, is one that puzzles many people.” That was a sentence from my paper that was supposed to introduce this true story of a crime.
Since my theme is now focused on “pon farr” and crimes of passion, I have found it hard to find good articles about the facts of crimes of passion and have found more or specific horror stories about people and the crimes of passion they had committed. I also feel like I have a lot of sources that I only pull one or two things from, though this could be not necessarily bad. Let me know that you think about all of this please!
Primero, intente escribir su papel en espanol. Entonces, intente escribir su papel en ingles. Entonces, parecera mas facil.
ReplyDeleteI lol at Leslie's comment. Sam, I think that your new topic would be great to write about. It seems though that you are overwelmed with the amount of material that you have. Break it down a little bit further and you'll be fine.
ReplyDeleteIf you are confused about what order to put everything in, I always think to start with the least important info and then work my way to the most important. I feel that if you end your paper with a bang and wrap it all up it is a good way to write.
ReplyDeleteI think the way you are organinzing this sounds good. I don't think there's anything wrong with pulling one or two things from a lot of sources either.
ReplyDeleteI think you should really look at your sources and try to use the ones that are most specific to your topic. Most of the time, having a bunch of little quotes from different sources can become overwhelming for the reader
ReplyDeleteYou should definitely look at the what goes on before the actual crime as those are usually the most interesting and scary part about crimes of passion, or crimes blinded by passion.
ReplyDeleteI will go out and say that I think basically everyone is interested in a crime of passion. It is a sort of facinating phenomina that love creates such violence. Try and think of an order that is logical and makes sense to you. How would uyou like to hear what you are presenting?
ReplyDeleteI think that your topic is really good, and will be fun to write about. I also think your crazy for changing your whole paper, goodluck! Even if it's hard to find some good articles, it might be easier to find a couple strong points and mainly focus on those. It would probibly be easier than using a bunch of little facts
ReplyDeleteI also have been having trouble rearanging my paper becasue I took out a good amount from my 3 to 5 page one. Just think about a few main things you want to talk about and then find some good research some you can expalin them.
ReplyDeleteI think that only having one or two things pulled from a source isn't necessarily bad, I think it just means that you need to find more sources. Also, I would try google scholar. You can get really good sources because you can be really specific about what you want.
ReplyDeleteI know exactly how it feels to have to start over fresh with half the time you had before you started in the first place.....
ReplyDeletethat sounds like a very interesting paper. i dont think having a lot of sources will be a problem. it might actually make your paper better.
ReplyDeleteIf you can find one specific crime and use that to connect it to what happens in Star Trek, it might make your point a little more clear to your readers, who probably haven't seen much Star Trek.
ReplyDeleteI know what you mean, each paper I've done so far has been on a different topic. I find that if you can, try to find another episode or rewatch your primary one and try to pull direct quotes from it and see if they don't spark something else that you could mention in your paper.
ReplyDeleteI think your new topic will definately help you write a better paper. What I would do first, is just throw together all of your information. Write it all down and don't worry too much about how it sounds yet. Then I would just revise and edit, making it flow better and get rid of the irrelevant information. If you are still having problems, go to the writing center and get some extra credit.
ReplyDeleteTry making the implicit explicit. It will help you strech your paper and maybe even help refine your thesis.
ReplyDeleteI don't think you necessarily need real-life statistics regarding crimes of passion (although those would be great). I think you could also use examples from the media to support your idea. (a movie or tv show's plot, or maybe news article about a real crime of passion)
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